Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Human beings always love role models, and they idolize them and try to imitate celebrities' way of thinking. Some people believe that famous persons have more influence on youth than adults. On the other hand, others think that celebrities are more important for old people. I firmly subscribe to the former group because of two main reasons mentioned in the following paragraphs.
At first, celebrities are mostly young and are of the same age as young people, affecting youths more than older persons. To be more specific, celebrities' way of thinking is closer to the younger generation's beliefs. Therefore, youths usually follow them and try to become more like them. With this in mind, and considering that youths actually love being up to date and behave fashion and modern, they imitate popular persons' treatments and follow their opinions. For example, teenagers use the same coating as their favorite actors or use haircuts like their popular musicians. On the other hand, celebrities' beliefs couldn't influence adults' opinions because their lifestyle is far from famous persons.
Secondly, as youths imagine celebrities like heroes and idolize them like gods, celebrities' opinions impress their life. In contrast, adults are aware that celebrities are just simple persons without scientific and amazing ideas. This distinction between youths' and older persons' imaginations leads to their different behavior against celebrities. To make it more clear, consider the impact of movie stars' lifestyle on youngsters. Youths are always engaged by their favorite actors' Instagram page and follow his/her opinions about diverse contemporary issues. Therefore, as this actor is a myth and a hero, his/her thinking is significantly acceptable for youths. But old people see them like usual persons and are aware that, like other people, actors will always be and have always been flawed. Thus, celebrities' opinions are not a way of thinking for them.
To sum up, young people are very influenced by celebrities' opinions than older ones. There are two major causes of this issue: youths mentally are more close to celebrities and look at them as heroes and gods. We can use these impressive impacts of famous persons on youths to teach them moral characteristics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in contrast, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31754874652 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64049221935 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518105849582 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.6317090035 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.9047619048 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0952380952 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201793658294 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681731060869 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446169100018 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149947067152 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349045070094 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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