Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because people are busy doing so
many different things, they do very few things well.
Nowadays, due to the expansion of technology and science, there is an immense amount of information. In this regard, it is impossible to become a professional in several different areas. Though some are of the opinion that learning many different things leads to gaining more experience and having more opportunities, personally, I subscribe to the notion that those who do a variety of things cannot do their jobs aptly on account of lack of time and concentration.
First and foremost, devoting enough time to your project is the key to do the job successfully. When you want to start doing a new thing, you need particular knowledge in that field which you can find on the internet, inside the books, or by attending classes. All of the mentioned activities are time-consuming. Not to mention other burdens like testing and experiencing what you have learned practically by yourself. Hence, when one wants to do different things simultaneously, he will suffer from a lack of time which results in completely problematic outcomes. For instance, when I was at the university, a friend of mine wanted to learn a programming language. He was really determined to learn that language, but when he read about another interesting language, he decided to learn it too. After a year, I asked my friend to do a project for me with one of those programming languages, but he told me that he neither had enough time to learn both languages thoroughly nor could leave learning one of them. Had he devoted enough time to learning one language at a time, he could have become a professional programmer at the end of the year. So, it is clear that lack of time is one of the reasons behind the low quality of doing several jobs.
Secondly, concentration plays a pivotal role in doing the jobs flawlessly. Many complain about lack of attention when they have to handle different things at the same time. They can neither choose which job has the higher priority nor think about their current task. Consequently, they cannot do their jobs properly. My own experience is compelling in this regard. Last year, the need to make more money forced me to take on several projects at a time. In the beginning, everything was excellent, but when I was near the deadlines, I encountered a strange problem. I had two days left, and I not only could concentrate on solving the problem, but also I could not decide which of the project was of the higher priority. In the end, I neither made money nor did the project aptly because of the lack of concentration.
To sum up, devoting enough time and having enough concentration are the keys that one should bear in mind to handle his jobs appropriately. Hence, those who want to do several things will suffer from a lack of time and concentration, which leads to their failure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... impossible to become a professional in several different areas. Though some are of the opinion t...
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Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...h some are of the opinion that learning many different things leads to gaining more experience...
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Line 2, column 261, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...ide the books, or by attending classes. All of the mentioned activities are time-consuming...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2316.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76543209877 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90181239321 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469135802469 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6803709537 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205819873046 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638023578145 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723411558266 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140822342386 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040740078418 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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