Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Nowadays, due to financial situations, market demands, and numerous available information on the Internet people tries multitasking. Although some people may believe that by doing assorted things we have a better chance to achieve our aspirations, I believe that by multitasking we may decrease our focus and lose our main target; Moreover, because doing different things needs various skills, and the fact that we do not have enough time to learn all of these skills, we cannot achieve these diverse goals in a well manner.
First and foremost, by doing so many diverse things, we cannot focus properly on a meaningful goal. It is crystal-clear that people who have achieved some significant goals in their life span had a single vivid objective and tried hard to accomplish that goal; for instance, a renowned person like Bill Gates, the industrious CEO of Microsoft, focused on his goal to create a prestigious company, so he put all of his effort to do that; as a result, he made his dream come true and enjoyed its benefits. By multitasking and doing a lot of unrelated jobs we cannot allocate adequate time to each of them. Hence, we cannot get a positive desired result. Besides, we may become frustrated if we cannot do a single thing very well. Recently conducted research shows that people who make themselves occupied for doing parallel jobs cannot acquire their desired outcome. Thus, the more we can focus on a single defined purpose, the more chance we have to get it done in a well manner.
Additionally, due to the fact that we have a limited time in our lives and each job needs different skills, we do not have enough to learn these vast skills. In our modern era, we must have expertise in order to do different things; therefore, should we try to do different jobs or tasks simultaneously without a profound knowledge, we cannot become succeed in the long run. For example, since the jobs such as online trading, programming, writing, and so forth needs unique skills, we cannot become a prominent writer, a well-known programmer, and an affluent trader concurrently. Each of them needs hours of training, reading, and continuous practicing, so it is better for us to set a certain goal and try to reach it and then plan to conquer the next challenge. Not only can we waste our time by doing different tasks, but also we may become despondent in the long run. Thus, the more we try to do different jobs in parallel, the more we may get lost.
All in all, although some people believe that by doing different tasks and having various goals at the same time we can achieve our ideals in a shorter time, I believe that by multitasking we may get lost and achieve nothing; Furthermore, We do not have enough time to gain the knowledge and expertise to accomplish all of these goals very well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...titasking we may decrease our focus and loose our main target; Moreover, because doin...
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Suggestion: don't
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...allocate adequate time to each of them. Hence we cannot get a positive desired result...
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Suggestion: don't
...and each job needs different skills, we dont have enough to learn these vast skills....
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76180698152 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69513112285 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4681724846 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.509792185 48.9658058833 222% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 144.9375 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4375 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195131737601 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881490002277 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622215586772 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141583038946 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319811832851 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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