Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Personally, I agree that when people are busy doing a lot of things, they do very few things well. I believe that in the modern world, especially with the fast pacing life style, many people often get their hands full and try to multi-task. However "efficient" they may claim it so, in most cases it just proves the other way around. In the following passages, I'll illustrate it by two reasons.
The first reason is that, it is inevitable for people to confuse and get distracted by their diverse works. It can be easily observed in our daily life. Sometimes when we go to a famous restaurant, we would have higher chances getting a wrong dish when there are too many people dining there. Even if they are really experienced workers, they can't avoid this kind of mistakes because they are doing a lot of things in the same time. Another example comes fromm my personal experience. Last month, I needed to submit a lot of final reports for my English Literature and American Literature classes. Since they are basically of the same category of study, for example I needed to remember the author and their works, I ended up mixed the names of the author who both wrote love poetry. From the above example, it is obvious that when people work on too many things at the same time, it's easier for them to get distracted and confused.
Secondly, this way of multi-tasking often leave them with few time to refine their work. Take the above example again. When the restaurant is full of people, the shop owner would want the orders be done as soon as possible. Thus, when we get the meal, we may have a plate of pasta that has fewer decorations than it usually does, and we might get a cup of black tea with the tea stains on the cup. This can also apply to students in the final week. Because of the huge loads of final reports they need to submit, it leads them to have little time perfecting each work. The attempts of refining their work will be subjected to time limits. In the end, they would just submit the rough works. Thus, it is fairly to say that when people are multi-tasking, it get them to the situation of low quality of works.
In conclusion, though some may suggest that doing many things at the same time is an efficient and could help save time. In my point of view, people would just end up messed things up by getting confused from each other. Also, efficiency doesn't equal to high quality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...their hands full and try to multi-task. However 'efficient' they may claim it...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ey are really experienced workers, they cant avoid this kind of mistakes because the...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'few times'.
Suggestion: few times
... of multi-tasking often leave them with few time to refine their work. Take the above ex...
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Message: Did you mean 'gets'?
Suggestion: gets
... that when people are multi-tasking, it get them to the situation of low quality of...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...fused from each other. Also, efficiency doesnt equal to high quality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.525 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41392204267 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7731763682 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9583333333 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212908535898 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586101626361 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980315065623 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150492534541 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0964721008058 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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