Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Knowing whether people are doing their job well or not, and the cause of it is a very important matter. Some people may think that people are doing all of their jobs well while others may disagree. In my opinion, people are not good at every job they are doing nowadays because of two main reasons.
The main reason is that they do not have enough time. Everybody is concerned with a lot of jobs from housekeeping, to childcare, to work-related issues. Hence, they cannot dedicate enough time for each of their tasks, so most of them will remain unsatisfied. Furthermore, they do not have sufficient time to learn how to do various jobs. For example, my cousin is responsible for housekeeping and taking care of her daughter while she has a fulltime job. Always, she has problems doing all these works and often does them very bad. Once, she had left her daughter in laundry shop and two hours later she just had realized that she was missing, however, fortunately, a woman has found and took care of her. This and plenty of similar situations taught me one cannot concentrate on his job if he had a lot of things to do.
The other important reason is that there are plenty of jobs which needs specialization nowadays. Unlike the past, these days almost all jobs are specialized nowadays, and there is different companies and organizations to do these jobs. For instance in the past people were used to raise their children by themselves but these days there are childcare centers everywhere whose teachers and instructors are trained and educated and know how to make connections with children and teach them. My brother, for example, sends his son to one of these centers while his wife and he are at work. They, always, have problems how to teach their son different things and was disciplining him for not learning. However, since he is going to the childcare center, he has learned a lot of useful things, and behaves well at home as well. This experience clearly shows that everyone cannot be good at everything. Instead, they can use specialized jobs to share their own responsibilities, so that all of their jobs will be done well.
To sum up, though, some may disagree with my idea but I believe that everyone cannot do all of their tasks well. Not only does not they have enough time but also they are not specialized to do various jobs. I think, people should devise plans to share their responsibilities in order to make sure that they will do all their job as well as they can.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Always' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
... daughter while she has a fulltime job. Always, she has problems doing all these works...
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Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are different companies'?
Suggestion: there are different companies
... all jobs are specialized nowadays, and there is different companies and organizations to do these jobs. For...
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Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... of these centers while his wife and he are at work. They, always, have problems ho...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65610859729 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5892002125 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481900452489 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4598865258 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5454545455 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2473915909 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892869312036 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671183046487 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184120613734 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510255415315 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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