Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays with technological advancement, people are busy with different works. Their busy schedule and desire goal sometimes difficult to satisfy with the quality of work. However, some people think that different work is essential for daily activity which never is in low quality and others think that specific task always is done with care. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I prefer the latter one which I will elaborate followings.
First and foremost, human concentration is limited. When they try different tasks at the same time they cannot give proper concentration. Moreover, at the same time to retain concentration on different task result is poor quality performance. For instance, when I was in high school I was interested in music and dance. For practising dance and music matching time with the school schedule was difficult for me. Moreover, at the exam time to focus on the several dance or music program and perform well was really hard. After several years later I only focused on academic activity because of this hardship.
Furthermore, focusing on a particular task people can gather profound knowledge, expertise and can show the hidden talent. Present days field diversity is so common that if people try to gain knowledge on varies field they will face cumbersome. Besides, with a shorter time to perform all the job with proper output is really challenging. I am not discouraging people to perform but to achieve knowledge on the different subject is hard. We all know about Aristotle who was expertise on the various subject matter but in past job, the field was limited. Moreover, people in that era only required a few subject knowledge to attain a successful career which is not possible in this decade. For particular, I am an electrical engineer but I have some knowledge of computer science. Project analysis, collecting data, controlling the machine and installation is really time-consuming and I never get enough time to diverse my focus on a computer science subject.
To recapitulate, personally I believe people should concentrate on a specific subject and try to acquire deep knowledge rather than choose a different field. It is okay after specialized in a field they can diverse their focus on another field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...remost, human concentration is limited. When they try different tasks at the same ti...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun dance seems to be countable; consider using: 'several dances'.
Suggestion: several dances
...eover, at the exam time to focus on the several dance or music program and perform well was r...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...emic activity because of this hardship. Furthermore, focusing on a particular ta...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'few subject knowledge'.
Suggestion: few subject knowledge
...eover, people in that era only required a few subject knowledge to attain a successful career which is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19363395225 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92205376674 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522546419098 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2997042734 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1363636364 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117864570837 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367648932565 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383562599357 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755548151487 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241147255939 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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