Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
In my opinion, brisk alteration of the technology, culture and community is affecting citizens largely, especially seriously and having severe influence for individuals. I feel this way for several main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, because technology is developing rapidly, workers and students are required to expend more time to keep up with advancement of science. For this reason, leisure of individuals have been declining in value, which causes them to spend less time with people whom they love or are intimate. Particularly, many students complain that they are consuming plenty of time for lesson and has small amount of time for recreation and sleep, which makes the life not enjoyable. For instance, some of my friends are struggling to get fine grade and rarely meeting with each other. When I met with them at last, they were complaining about how hard studying at university is. Most pupils except students as well as me who love learning and exploring new things are miserable about life. Moreover, even if they consume less time for studying, their grade and future will be displeasing for them.
Secondly, the modification of the technology and culture poses conflict between generations since their attitude toward matters are somewhat different. To be more specific, when the new trend and technology gets popular among young people, elders tend to criticizing the novel things and people who are favoring these things because they prefer preceding matters. For example, since the smartphone was released, senior people were holding negative opinion about the smartphone while adolescents utilize and take advantage on it. Therefore, parents are reprimanding their children for using new technology despite the fact that they are utilizing it for appropriate purpose such as studying and communicating. On the other hand, juveniles including me do not understand the reason why elders are not capable of using this. Moreover, this discrepancy of opinion posed friction between generations, which makes most people to be less satisfied.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion than most people are unhappy about their life and society because of alteration of the world. This is because things they perform is have increased greatly and conflict between generations are taking place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33692722372 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73490749004 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576819407008 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4809259744 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.470588235 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8235294118 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160615916897 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536626990266 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468142296386 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956718522076 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046978840249 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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