The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States, the best way to improve profits in all of their stores is to drop stocking many of their varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses as the sale of the domestic cheese was increased the previous year. On deducing the conclusion, the argument takes the last year sales data that states all of the five best-selling kinds of cheese at their newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. however, the argument does not take the following assumptions to make it substantial.
At first, they assume the taste of the consumer will be same in the upcoming years. The taste of the consumer is very volatile as it keeps on changing on moving times. perhaps, the consumer may feel detested of other cheese as they have used it for a long time. So they may want to change the taste of their tongue for a while. Ongoing this trend, it cannot be denied that they will again satisfy with the domestic cheese and they again will tend to consume previously.
Secondly, it fails to mention the price of a different variety of cheeses. it is a universal fact that people tend to consume the less expensive product for their use. perhaps the price of the domestic cheese may be less than other imported cheese. That's why people may have consume more cheese in the USA. however, it is certain that on increasing demand, the price of a commodity increases. if the demand of domestic cheese is increase, its price will increase as well. On increasing price of the cheese, the demand of it may be reversed.
Thirdly, the argument fails to account the availabilty of the cheese in what extent. There is always a rule in economices that if the amount of the commodity available above the demand, its price may again be decreased. if they stored all the domestic cheese in the factory and their is excess of the cheese, they will soon be encountered with loss as the cost price of the cheese for them above than the selling price of the cheese. On the other hand, if they stores only one product, they would certainly lose their product diversity which is essential in meeting preferences of the product of a diverse type.
In conclusion, the argument fails to account this above assumptions before makina g conclusion that makes the argument insubstantial. if they have considered the assumptions, the conclusion taken would have been strong.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2118 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.717 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.502 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.378 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.657 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.184 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 420, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...es the last year sales data that states all of the five best-selling kinds of cheese at th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 674, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...domestic cheeses among its subscribers. however, the argument does not take the followi...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...s it keeps on changing on moving times. perhaps, the consumer may feel detested of othe...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...rice of a different variety of cheeses. it is a universal fact that people tend to...
^^
Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...e less expensive product for their use. perhaps the price of the domestic cheese may be...
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Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'consumed'.
Suggestion: consumed
... cheese. Thats why people may have consume more cheese in the USA. however, it is ...
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Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ay have consume more cheese in the USA. however, it is certain that on increasing deman...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...nd, the price of a commodity increases. if the demand of domestic cheese is increa...
^^
Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...mand, its price may again be decreased. if they stored all the domestic cheese in ...
^^
Line 7, column 279, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
... the domestic cheese in the factory and their is excess of the cheese, they will soon...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 462, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'store'
Suggestion: store
... the cheese. On the other hand, if they stores only one product, they would certainly ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... that makes the argument insubstantial. if they have considered the assumptions, t...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86577181208 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6378827298 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44966442953 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3652830098 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8636363636 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3181818182 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260663215958 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676845239381 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967324835117 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134216993609 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140598605971 0.0628817314937 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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