The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Clearly the author of the paper has made many assumption in coming to the main conclusion that the best way to improve profits in all of their stores is to discontinue stocking many of their varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses on the premise of the survey result by cheeses of the Word magazine.
The author has made several assumption that are not supported, primarily the assumption that since local cheese are the 5 best selling cheese in their new stores then this could be a reflection of consumer preference without taking into consideration that new stores mean new location and new people with a varied taste preference which could be the reason for the peak in the preference of local cheese so therefore this is not a reflection of a larger population. Also the author does not consider that there might be some underlying factor, ( i.e could it be that there was an increase in price of imported cheese of some form of temporary ban). If the factor changes ith might mean that sales pattern would return to normal.
Furthermore, the argument is also anchored on the fact that the survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers which would have been tenable if this survey had specified the sample population and location coverage. The survey could have been concentrated in a place where people are particular about domestic product or the amount of people surveyed were very scant and in which case would see to the result as unreliable.
Additionally, the author also assumes that increased sales of domestic cheese is tantamount to increased profit without considering the fact that the sudden increase to the request of domestic cheese could cause the prices to sky rocket as the demands pressure might the exacting on the demand supply chain of the domestic cheese market.
Ultimately, the authors argument is weaken due to his/her failure tp directly tie the sudden in burgeon in the preference of domestic cheese to a reliable sample survey or economic phenomenon and so the author could bolster his/her argument if he could show the data of the survey of the cheeses of the World magazine as a holistic analysis of the general preference of people within Wisconsin.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1887 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.863 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.602 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 48.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.519 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.452 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.777 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'many assumptions'.
Suggestion: many assumptions
...learly the author of the paper has made many assumption in coming to the main conclusion that t...
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Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...he Word magazine. The author has made several assumption that are not supported, primarily the a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: SO_THEREFORE[1]
Message: Use simply 'so' or 'therefore'.
Suggestion: so; therefore
... peak in the preference of local cheese so therefore this is not a reflection of a larger po...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ot a reflection of a larger population. Also the author does not consider that there...
^^^^
Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t there might be some underlying factor, i.e could it be that there was an increa...
^^
Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d cheese of some form of temporary ban. If the factor changes ith might mean that ...
^^
Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...mestic cheese market. Ultimately, the authors argument is weaken due to his/her fail...
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Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
.... Ultimately, the authors argument is weaken due to his/her failure tp directly tie...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 58, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uthors argument is weaken due to his/her failure tp directly tie the sudden in bu...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02857142857 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6466066768 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45974025974 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 22.8473053892 210% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.806196325 57.8364921388 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 242.0 119.503703932 203% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.125 23.324526521 206% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156525657343 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704466886395 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578132559696 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967573066228 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548356378156 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.3 14.3799401198 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.76 48.3550499002 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 12.197005988 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.2 11.1389221557 190% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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