The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The author of this argument has based his recommendation on assumptions without in-depth evidence of research to back his suggestion been that at first instance Hamana University cannot be prototyped as similar in characteristics to Omni university firstly because they are not of the same location and might not be offering very similar degree program. For instance Omni University might be offering courses that do not need practical training while Humana University could be the direct opposite.
Although there could be a relationship between the commencement of online online programs and increase in enrollment, it isn’t clear for what reason. In a case were regular admissions are more stringent than online degree admission processes then there would be an expected rise in admissions through the online programs.
The author further maintains that the introduction of online programs to Hamana will help to increase enrollment and solve it’s budget problem without any survey that explains logically the reason for stagnant level of the student population. Perhaps due to lack of good advertisement, publicity, good reseasrch and employment of repute lectures and if so be the case the introduction of online programs will have little or no effect.
Additionally, the author’s also assumes that the decrease in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space is directly related to the increase in their online degree program which might not necessarily be so as this decrease in expenditure can be due to several factors not limited to the fact that their student enrollment has generally reduced or neglect, perhaps they have even gotten funding well enough to reduce expenditure for dormitory and class and probably recently did a thorough renovation which would reduce such expenditures.
Finally, the author’s case would have been better strengthen if he specific data on the funding nature of Omni University to be able to ascertain the inflows and outflows of the university as well as a comprehensive statistic of Omni’s students population before the introduction of the online course and after a few years of commencement.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1786 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.3 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.934 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.667 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.402 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.758 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: online
...elationship between the commencement of online online programs and increase in enrollment, it...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t any survey that explains logically the reason for stagnant level of the student...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, so, then, well, while, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 336.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47916666667 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06698991752 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550595238095 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.715975789 57.8364921388 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 230.125 119.503703932 193% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.0 23.324526521 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.70786347227 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19260196693 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899912876262 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371858518068 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107246866722 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363960615248 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.4 14.3799401198 177% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 11.93 48.3550499002 25% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 12.197005988 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.37 8.32208582834 125% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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