The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
While the writer maintains that the change in margarine has not had an impact on the customers, he does affirm on what dish, or if he made a research on this concern. A research to find out if the customers noticed the change, if there is something else they are more particular about.
Although the writer mentions that 2 percent of customers have complained, he doesn’t state whether he had done a studies with a questionnaire with related questions to define the position of a sample of 100 customers.
Additionally, the writer concludes that customers are happy since only 2 percent of customers have complained indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy might not be reliable since this might have been all on the first day of change from butter to margarine.
Since the amount of sample people upon which the conclusion was made are just 100, it can not be be a good sample representation of the people who live in southwestern Unites States are 100 is an minute sample in a region of millions of inhabitants.
Even though few customers complain when given margarine instead of butter there is no evidence of the effect of either choosing between butter or margarine in terms of what bye product will be served to the customers at the end.
In conclusion, It would have been better if the writer had carried out a study of a larger sample of people across all Happy pancake house Restaurant in the Southwestern United states so as to get a more reliable and holistic overview of the customers preference.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 270 350
No. of Characters: 1240 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.593 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.677 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.91 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.487 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.931 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 140, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...does affirm on what dish, or if he made a research on this concern. A research to find out...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: Research
... if he made a research on this concern. A research to find out if the customers noticed th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a study' or simply 'studies'?
Suggestion: a study; studies
... doesn't state whether he had done a studies with a questionnaire with related quest...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: be
...usion was made are just 100, it can not be be a good sample representation of the peo...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 194, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...n southwestern Unites States are 100 is an minute sample in a region of millions o...
^^
Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lions of inhabitants. Even though few customers complain when given margarine ...
^^
Line 11, column 119, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of a larger sample of people across all Happy pancake house Restaurant in the S...
^^
Line 11, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ross all Happy pancake house Restaurant in the Southwestern United states so as ...
^^
Line 11, column 187, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...rant in the Southwestern United states so as to get a more reliable and holistic overv...
^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... states so as to get a more reliable and holistic overview of the customers prefe...
^^
Line 11, column 246, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
... reliable and holistic overview of the customers preference.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 269.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75092936803 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77812837423 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524163568773 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.8473053892 166% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.7392507667 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.571428571 119.503703932 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.4285714286 23.324526521 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164845231748 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751900228376 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654564999327 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837552825463 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671508147452 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 14.3799401198 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.37 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.197005988 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.1389221557 154% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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