Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to learn is by following the examples set by others. Use specific reasons and details to support your answers.
Nowadays individuals understood the value of education and do their best to augment their backpack of knowledge. Therefore, it is important to follow some examples which have been set by others. I feel this way for two reasons which will be amplified in subsequent essay.
First of all, choosing a role model helps us to find the way we would be following. It is because they have the experiences that would completely aid us to strength our learning capacity. When individuals try hard and tolerate lots of arduous problems, it means they have learnt ample of lessons by due course of time. Apart from their experiences, they are adept people that referring to them would help us to adjust our time management. My own experience is a compelling example like this. When I was going to learn English language, it was very complex to me how to memorize and utilize the words. Once, one of my friends introduced an English instructor to me. I went to him and told him my problems. As he himself had experienced the complexities like me, he passionately advised me and showed me the way how to memorize the words and use them in the passages. As a result, introducing a role model helped me to know the lessons I had never understood. Had not I chosen a role model for me, I could not have learnt how to memorize and use the words.
Secondly, using others’ examples can enhance our development. There are times that we need to accelerate our activities and it needs much time, but when we have role models, we can easily refer to them and use their experiences regarding the affairs are going to be done by us. As an example, when I was working as an intern in Directorate of Agriculture, Irrigation and Livestock, I was the organizer of social programs. I was mobilizing the programs of new year which were supposed to be held in the summer. Although, I was preparing a presentation according to the schedule my director had given to me. It should be as comprehensive as possible; otherwise, I would have lost my job. The ceremony was coming up and I had to prepare it as soon as possible. Anyway, when I was searching in the internet about some materials, I abruptly saw a prepared template which had been prepared by one of my faculty professors. Afterward, I downloaded the template and used its materials in my own presentation. As a result, it helped me to speed my acceleration up to prepare the presentation according to the schedule I had currently received from my boss. Had not I used from my professor prepared template, I would unfortunately have lost my tenure.
Finally, some examples of others who have lots of experiences in many tasks would cooperate us to solve the problems we have in our life. Having a role model helps to improve our knowledge and motivates us to be an example to other. Thorough learning and using from others’ examples we can be also a role model for others who are coming after us.
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...were supposed to be held in the summer. Although, I was preparing a presentation accordi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, finally, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, i feel, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2428.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66923076923 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87875751367 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467307692308 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1699592056 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7142857143 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0902715718547 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0291195920242 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041028268135 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799484457501 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622827946754 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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