Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? "Children aged 15 and above should be allowed to vote". Use specific details and examples to show why you agree or disagree.
The world is rapidly changing based on technological advancements, increased moral depravity, and important decision making heuristics. It is commendable that adolescents have been allowed to partake in activities like driving. However, I disagree with allowing them to vote early because they are just too young to make adult decisions and we could make them force our hands into letting them do things only adults could do before.
Children aged fifteen to eighteen are too young to understand the concepts needed to influence quality choices like tax-reform bills and immigration laws. Thus, politicians could play on this inexperience of theirs by making vague and vain promises just to win over these babies. For instance, a politician could promise more holidays or less tests just to sway votes to his side. These policies do not necessarily affect the country positively, however, the numbers could be in favor of such politicians. As a result, the more responsible and older voters could easily become less important and wrong policies could take center stage thus, potentially hurting a country more.
Furthermore, allowing adolescents the opportunity to vote is encouraging them to push for other age-related prohibitory laws to be reviewed. To be more specific, if children can vote, they could push for the right to drink at such tender ages. I cannot imagine the devastating consequences this would have on a nation. At such young ages, children should focus on getting the right guidance and education instead of voting and asking for other society-destroying rights and privileges. Clearly, the demerits of encouraging early voting can be disastrous.
As mentioned, our societies are getting more modern and sophisticated, however, it is better to keep the age-old tradition of restricting voting to adults as it is. Consequently, bad leaders would not be elected into power and other age-related prohibitions would not be removed for children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun tests is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38187702265 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01291543685 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595469255663 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9610004675 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.866666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129533297205 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445374417243 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332381293678 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817714687811 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262512041692 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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