Should adults stay in their home communities or they should move out to bigger cities. Which do you support? Be sure to include specific details and examples to support your opinion.
Growing up remains an inevitable aspect of human life. It gets to a point where an adult must decide where to stay. Do you stay proximal to your hometown or do you move far away? I am of the opinion that changing addresses to a more urban region is better not only because it makes it possible for you to experience other cultures; you can easily advance your career path also.
The essence of adulthood is psychological growth and seeing the cultures of others is the best way to experience this change. In a country, it is wrong to think that the way of life in your vicinity is what obtains elsewhere around the state<span class="hiddenGrammarError" pre="state "></span>. To be more explicit, one cannot be as far away from the truth like that. My personal experience is a compelling example of that. As I completed school, I decided to leave my village and move to the state capital. In my village, we prostrated to greet those older than we were and that was the norm. To my greatest surprise, the experiences during my initial weeks at the capital city were in stark contrast to what I thought was normal - people just walked by people while they greeted them. I continued to prostrate, ultimately, I had to stop because I was always being ridiculed; to them, it was weird. You see, at the capital city, people from diverse cultures converged; trying to enforce personal cultures on others was a guaranteed path to failure. As a result, people altogether devised a general and more acceptable means of salutation. I cannot understate the importance of getting an opportunity to experience other cultures like this, because it gives one the opportunity to grow intellectually.
What’s more, staying in a metropolitan area affords the possibility to advance in one’s career path. One simply cannot expect success in a chosen field by staying put in rural communities. The opportunities are few and far-fetched, and mentors are hard to find. On the other hand, staying in the city is solving half of the problems encountered on one’s path to success. For instance, in my local community, there is only one county clinic with just one physical therapist. Opting to stay there would have been plain suicidal because I would be killing my urge to become a sports physical therapist. Staying in the city led to my getting a much-coveted residency spot at the biggest hospital in my country; I am currently closer to my dream now than ever before. It is interesting because this shows one of the benefits attached to changing locations, which is the possibility to make more career choices.
To conclude, while some may argue that staying in one’s local community allows one the opportunity to nurture the younger ones and give back to the community, I believe it is foolhardy to stick to one location throughout one’s life. It is better to experience cultures on the grand stage and be a more successful person than to remain a local champion with no focus. I would encourage my children to consider the same decisions I made as an adult.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...you can easily advance your career path also. The essence of adulthood is psychol...
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Line 6, column 157, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...imply cannot expect success in a chosen field by staying put in rural communities. Th...
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Line 6, column 587, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a sport' or simply 'sports'?
Suggestion: a sport; sports
...se I would be killing my urge to become a sports physical therapist. Staying in the city...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, while, for instance, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2570.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89523809524 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17877317231 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 836.1 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.095065371 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8461538462 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1923076923 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.69230769231 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101919565959 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315534871691 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430679107666 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770173163757 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052855995578 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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