Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
It is fascinating that society strives for perfection; It ranges from finding the cure for erstwhile incurable diseases to technological advancements that make our lives so much easier. However, have we taken the time to think about the impact these have on our environment? In my opinion, newer and more sophisticated means of conveying man, goods, and services have done more harm than good. My reasons are going to be discussed in the following essay.
The world is getting decimated by greenhouse gases and pollutions especially from the cars and ships we use. The pollutants from vehicles contain the carbon monoxide gas which is toxic to the atmosphere and wears our ozone layer thin. What's worse is that these pollutants are directly responsible for major diseases affecting children. Moreover, they contain a plethora of carcinogens which we breathe in. For instance, In China, the air quality in mainland china is deemed the worst in the world. When I visited China two years ago, the visibility was so poor because of smog, and I had no other choice but<span class="hiddenGrammarError" pre="I "></span> to use face mask as I was literally breathing smoke. I always got home so exhausted and feeling congested. I just could not wait to go back home; it was a horrible experience. Cars and ships may make life easier for commuters and businesses but their environmental impact is clear for all to see.
What's more, using these mediums of transportation increases the risks for accidents to occur. Accidents claim the lives of a lot of people around the world daily and the major cause of these accidents are transportation based. For instance, in Nigeria, the road safety corporation asserts that road accidents claim the lives of 200 Nigerians every day. This statistic is a striking example of how bad modernization of our transport system has been. In contrast, if we had continued with the camels and horses, moving goods and services around would have been more hectic, however, the accidents would be few and far within.
In conclusion, some may argue that modern systems of commuting make life generally easier, I strongly disagree with such argument because our earth is getting destroyed and people are getting killed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14363143631 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22207748666 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60433604336 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5431281099 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8947368421 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0861448993639 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0250032939957 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0218613390061 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0493991811048 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185105968787 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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