Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’ s development.
These days with the pervasiveness of technology, its destructive and constructive effects become more visible. Also, their effects on children are inevitable. We can see that the type of children's game is completely different from the past. Not long ago, just about one or two decades ago, children used to play outsides with their friends or just play with legos. By developing technology, computer games have become the first choice of children for playing. Personally, I believe playing with simpler toys or playing with other children would be better for children's development and also can affect lots of other factors in a child. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs:
First of all, the advantages of playing with other friends are not limited just to childhood. Playing with other children helps a child to gain some abilities such as how to contact others, how to cope with arguments during a game, and an important one how to make friends. On the other hand, playing with simpler toys like legos dull and do the puzzles help the creativity of the child and improve the imaginations of the child.
Second, one of the negative points about computer games is that the user doesn't have any mobilities. Most computer games are designed in a way that you should sit for long hours and just press the bottoms and this can be really harmful especially for children. Children need to have mobilities and have physical movements to release their energy and prevent obesity which is a common problem among the new generations. Unlike the old type of games which needed lots of physical movements.
Besides, Some computer games are so aggressive and not appropriate for children. But they are available for them so from an early age they play some brute games. Unconsciously, these games affect their feelings.
In conclusion, the benefits of simpler toys like a dull toy car and playing outside with friends would be better for children both mentally and physically way.
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, really, second, so, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97297297297 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62588874252 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525525525526 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9911876381 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4117647059 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444271228434 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141208861402 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106214009439 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26152422355 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105626633087 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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