Throughout the history, people have always liked to learn new things, and nowadays, one method to implement this desire is that company spend money in order to their personals receive university degrees. In this regard, some people believe that it is not companies’ duties to pay for employees’ university degrees. I have enough reasons to think that the first idea carries more weight. I will enlarge on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, getting new university degrees is inextricably linked to improving people’s skills, and enhancing ones’ abilities means that they can have better performance in their workplace. As a result, if companies invest money in their personnel’s university degrees, they will make a great profit of that both in the short and long term. As a way of illustration, take big companies such as Kalleh. This dairy producer company often spends a considerable amount of money on its employees’ university degrees every year in order to have literate personnel. As a matter of fact, this company is really successful not only in my country, but also in the Asia since it has a number of graduate people who are very accomplished in different fields related to manufacturing dairy products. Therefore, companies will benefit, if they pay for employees to receive university degrees.
Secondly, people have to work as hard as possible to make ends meet, so they do not have enough money to allocate for paying university tuitions, and companies can help communities when they fund employees to receive degrees. To put it in more vivid picture, people have to work from dawn till dusk to meet family supplies because they have to pay for a lot of things. Consequently, no much money will remain for them to assign it to their university degrees even if they are so talented that they can reach zeniths of science. To solve this problem, companies should find their gifted employees and fund them to continue their studies at university since they can assist societies by finding these expertise people. Take my previous example, for illustration. The boss of the Kalle was an ordinary worker who used to work hard for a small factory in my hometown. He could get the fund with which he went to university and got new degree. Afterwards, he established his own company which is the best one all around the country. As a result, new gifted people will be discovered, who can aid their communities, if companies provide their personnel with the opportunities of getting degrees from universities.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that companies should allocate some part of their budget to their employees’ university degrees. Given the fact that, not only can companies make a big profit of that, but also they introduce new talented people to societies, which will be helpful for communities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... pay for a lot of things. Consequently, no much money will remain for them to assi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04201680672 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83421036507 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493697478992 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2988059869 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.285714286 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271362640639 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918995256572 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615060371779 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17938893369 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396690316148 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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