Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children has become more difficult task because now children spend more time on cell phone, online games and social web site. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Most people in the world think that way of thinking and the behavior of children can be easily amenable and manageable so educating them is also easy. However, I believe that ways of erudite to children are one of the most challenging tasks nowadays because they mostly engage in the modern technological appliance. There are several reasons why I feel this way, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it is inevitable to ignore modern technical appliances like cell phones, mobile, websites, etc. Since most of today's parents are involved in jobs related to technology, increasing the intimacy with the phones and the internet. It is said that parents are the first teacher of a child, and hence the children learn the lifestyle like that of parents. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My niece is engaged with mobile every time before and after school. Even at the time of dinner, she neglects the calling of her parents. She is more concentrated on her gaming. So that she does not want to do her home assignment. As a result, it becomes more challenging to teach and educate her.
Furthermore, due to globalization, every person in the world is influenced. For instance, children can learn and know everything from television and other internet resources. Psychologists claimed that the children show and exhibit elder behavior in the early stage i.e. young stage. This means the children behaved like old people at a young age. The main reason for this is the global effect. For instance, a recent research paper that I read, says that seven years old children think, discuss, and behave like fifty years old people. Due to this, the parents are in a challenging situation to educating their children.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that educating children is more difficult nowadays. This is because the parents are more actively engaged on their mobile phones so the children learn the same behavior and global influence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the todays') or simply say ''most todays''.
Suggestion: most of the todays; most todays
...ll phones, mobile, websites, etc. Since most of todays parents are involved in jobs related to...
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Line 2, column 599, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...She is more concentrated on her gaming. So that she does not want to do her home assign...
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Line 2, column 693, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'teaching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: teaching
...s a result, it becomes more challenging to teach and educate her. Furthermore, due to ...
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Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[4]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
...d. For instance, children can learn and know everything from television and other in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96978851964 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68217039438 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543806646526 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9081089762 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3333333333 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7619047619 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231215679281 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671744684104 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482345585184 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147645902771 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533083305685 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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