Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think having an extended family can make our lives happier Because you have a lot of friends, who care about you, without any effort. Especially in the past, they were very helpful in handeling different problems. But, nowadays, I think importance of extended family has decreased because of two reasons.
First, people need less each other to cooperate in different tasks. In the past, family remove their needs by themselves and there weren't facotries and companies for providing foods, clothes and other basic needs of life. For example, my paternal granfather has six boys and three daughters. The role of these children was very crutial for their family. Every one of them had a special task to do family works. My aunts were responsible for home works such as: preparing foods, cleaning, doing washing and so on. The main task of my uncles was to feed ships and take care of them and my grandfather was responsible for selling their products and buying other vital needs. So, in the past, a lot of people in a family needed for doing house tasks.
Second, the extended family were more powerful. In the past, there wasn't proper defence mechanisms for overcoming different threats. So, having a lot of relatives was vital to fight against invaders or wild animal. For example, my city was invaded by thieves for centuries and they attack families who were so weak. But my grandfather's family was too extended and they cooperate with each other to defend family. So, when thieves saw these determinded family with more numbers than them, they retreated and the family was safe for the most of time. So, extended family were very powerful for defending against threats.
In sum, I think the extended family in the past was more important than nowadays because of need in cooperating in different tasks and their more power against threats. Although extended families are imortants nowadays because they are happier families.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, as to, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94769230769 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44280564276 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513846153846 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7699223468 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192808721595 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682847735591 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367134330766 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130366981455 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147307369758 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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