TPO51: Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays people allocate a lot of time on watching movies and television. Movies and television have many consciouse and unconsciouse effects on viewers. Some people believe that these effects are more negative for convincing viewer for buying product, others think we can increase its possitive effects by proper using of them. I totally with the late opinion because of two reasons.
First, there are a lot of useful programs on TV. By using these programs, we can promote ourselves and have a better life. For example, in the time of corono viruse, all of schools were nearly closed in order to stopping the spread of virus. Because of that children were losing their classes and this could lead to illetrate children. However, one of the best tools to educate was TV. The government provided special programs for student in TV. So, student could easily turn on TV and were educated. In sum, TV has a lot of usefull programs which can lead to positive effects.
Second, TV can relief our nervousness and increase our happiness. There a lot of programs for creating fun and happiness in people. For instance, a while ago, I had a exam for addmission to a university. I was studying for a long time, which made me very exhausted and sad. This declined my efficiency, and after a while, I found out that I could not learn what I was studying. One day, I found a comedy series on TV that its time was at the same time with my resting time. I began to watch it every night and it increased my happiness. Every time after watching the series, I felt that I learn better, thereby I passed the exam with a high score. So, TV can decrease our anxiety and increase our happiness.
All and all, I believe that movies and television have more possitive effects because they have a lot of useful programs and they can relief our nervousness. However, movies and television have also negative effects such as increasing aggression between audience, which can be decreased by controlling types of programs that are watching.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eople. For instance, a while ago, I had a exam for addmission to a university. I ...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...atching the series, I felt that I learn better, thereby I passed the exam with a high ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ALL_AND_ALL[1]
Message: This phrase is nonstandard. Did you mean 'all in all' (=after all, nevertheless)?
Suggestion: All in all
...ur anxiety and increase our happiness. All and all, I believe that movies and television h...
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Line 4, column 339, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng types of programs that are watching.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72727272727 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59941163678 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502840909091 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5044798836 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.347826087 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3043478261 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4347826087 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155652215526 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447582252765 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746881895647 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135449358969 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11638592884 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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