Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Entertainers and athletes are the idle of our society who is cherish by the rising generation. They are the role model and also the country they represent is proud of their domicile. Nowadays, idles are deserving more privacy than what they are experiencing is the given statement- with this someone would agree but others would not. In my opinion, the role model needs an extra privacy for the following two important reason.
The main reason is that the information is open whatever person you are does not a big deal? The availability of internet makes the world more compact than before where by searching a name of big celebrity it is possible to know his or her personal details. The fraudsters are doing many trolls and unacceptable memes what actually put in danger the respective celebrity personal authenticity. For example, a few years ago, when I was studying in undergrad level, I experienced a underrated video of our countrys model. Her name was Prova and in this video, her personal Information were being hacked and then it was on aired. Due to the internet, within hours it has reached every classes of people and created a bad impression of that model. This experience taught me that the strong network security is needed to protect celebrities personal information to save their personage and social values.
Another reason is that often time it is noticeable that athletes are faced many vandalism. When, an athlete is not doing his or her best performance in a game then he or she faced different odd situation like, his or her hometown is raid by general people and also he or she faced unacceptable vulgar talk’s directly. To be more specific, when India was concede their lost to Bangladesh in 2010 cricket world cup, the players on that team faced vandalism in their hometown. Furthermore, their incarnation were created and put it to fire. Even though, these incidents is correlates with their fans agitation but for athletes family it was a genuine oddity. As you can see that one lose caused a huge unacceptable impacts to the celebrity and also on their family, so there needs to mandate some law to curb those incidence.
In conclusion, it is possible to argue with my reasoning by delineating on the other side of this issue but in reality those arguments will not pragmatic. Enhancing privacy not only helps athlete or model to pristine their personality but also save their family from incurring danger. So, it is high time to mandate some lawsuits to protect our models, entertainers and athletes security.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'cherished'.
Suggestion: cherished
...etes are the idle of our society who is cherish by the rising generation. They are the ...
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Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...roud of their domicile. Nowadays, idles are deserving more privacy than what they are experie...
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Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereby'?
Suggestion: whereby
...akes the world more compact than before where by searching a name of big celebrity it is...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le to know his or her personal details. The fraudsters are doing many trolls and un...
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Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...dying in undergrad level, I experienced a underrated video of our countrys model....
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Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun vandalism seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much vandalism', 'a good deal of vandalism'.
Suggestion: much vandalism; a good deal of vandalism
...t is noticeable that athletes are faced many vandalism. When, an athlete is not doing his or h...
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Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'conceded'.
Suggestion: conceded
...ly. To be more specific, when India was concede their lost to Bangladesh in 2010 cricke...
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Line 5, column 713, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'impact'?
Suggestion: impact
...hat one lose caused a huge unacceptable impacts to the celebrity and also on their fami...
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Line 5, column 807, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this incidence' or 'those incidences'?
Suggestion: this incidence; those incidences
...there needs to mandate some law to curb those incidence. In conclusion, it is possible to ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91435185185 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71526001699 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2913864049 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.15 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151607054035 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460714352186 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454647595329 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105494961924 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695499348757 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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