Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as military service or social work. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Needless to say that a truly successful person is not the one who achieves his highest ambition, but one who enjoys helping others reach theirs. Therefore, many young adults like to participate in numerous volunteer activities like helping the elderly to go around or children in schools in their spare time. Although many youths think that participation in those activities should be optional depending on their will and time, I would rather wholeheartedly believe that the government should require them to participate for two main reasons that I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that participation in those activities would be a rewarding experience for young people that will bring them numerous benefits. To elaborate on this point, I firmly believe it will sharpen their communication skills by giving them a chance to have face to face communication with others instead of chatting with others through electronic devices. Also, the majority of youths will prefer to participate in activities that are closely related to their majors. So, this chance would provide them with a real first-hand practical experience that will pave the way for them to find a better job opportunity in the future. For example, I vividly remember when I was in college ten years ago, I had a great passion for teaching. So, once an opportunity knocked my door to help my community, I opted to be a volunteer in a nearby elementary school to help young children for reading and mathematics. Frankly, that chance enabled me to gain a priceless experience from that the skilled teachers of that school who taught me how to help young children to grasp important information effectively. Also, face to face communication with others for at least six-hour per day during those activities enlarged my social network and enhanced my ability to communicate with people from different walks of life. As you can see, that marvelous chance certainly could enable youth to sharpen their communication and professional skills.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that activities could bring numerous benefits for the community and the society as well. To shield light on this point, I believe that finding candidates for assessing in military services, schools, hospitals can significantly help the government to provide the community with excellent services in many sectors like education, country's construction projects, health. My brother is a relevant example; he joined a volunteer organization in our community that directs their efforts toward young children. In other words, they always help young kids to read many books, motivate them to run for thirty minutes every day, and help them do their homework. So, within a few months, the rank of all elementary schools in our community have raised. Consequently, that has attracted many people to live there and has motived many investors to set up new projects too that have opened doors for adults to find a better job. As you can see, volunteer jobs can raise the standard of living and prosper the community.
In conclusion, if we contemplate the mentioned reasons, we will soon realize the government should require all young people to participate in those activities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, frankly, if, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2760.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20754716981 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88327322794 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 855.0 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.8241256559 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.0 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10305320325 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032338886672 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030567563217 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799900773909 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236806958957 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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