Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as military service or social work. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
The government has a tremendous role in raising young adults. There are many kinds of services that many governments around the world assigned to their teen in order to help them in their future such as doing some community work and participating in military services. Personally, I think there are several advantages of doing national services for young teenagers.
To begin with, when young adult performed some national tasks, they would be loyal to their country. Many national services enforce the love of the country and the community through being part of this country. All these services make young individuals feel that they are improving their home and make them so attached to the country. For example, In Japan, the government assigns military services for all teenagers before they send them abroad. During this military training period, young adults become more attached to the country and they learn how to fight anything in order to protect the country. Therefore, when they get a scholarship and go abroad, they can not stay a long time in a foreign country. Moreover, they would not betray their country no matter what happens with them.
Adding to the previous point, when teens did some national work, they would learn many important skills such as how to be a good fighter. These skills would help them and help the country at the same time. For instance, the United State government has this program for young people. They make them perform in the military when they reach 16 years old. As a result, most of their teens have fighting skills, so they can protect the country in case of invasion.
In sum, encouraging teens to perform some national duties is very beneficial for them. This is not only because it helps them to be loyal to their country, but also it allows them to learn some important skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88141025641 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37947258713 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496794871795 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3605257598 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5882352941 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3529411765 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177856823478 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699283398758 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051042957713 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127535756339 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608687247093 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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