Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
some people say that government should allocate more money for the arts than the athletics because arts are more important than athletics. However, I strongly disagree with these people, and I think that government should spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams than the support of arts. I will explain my position in two ways.
First of all, government should expend more money to improve athletics because athletics keep the people healthy and sound. For example, when I was in my cadet college, where athletics was one of the most important activity, I participated in many athletic events, and for this, I needed to practice a lot. Those practice sessions helped to gain my physical fitness, and as I was physically perfect and healthy, I was enthusiastic in other activities, such as reading, stage competitions. On the other hand, after my cadet college, I got admission in a technical university, where I had a little chance to participate in sports and athletics. As a result, I have lost my fitness and health, which ultimately made me lazy, feeble, and unproductive. It is important for the people of a nation to be healthy because without health people will become unproductive and lethargic. Development in athletics will encourage people to participate in different events, which will make the the nation healthier and productive, so athletics is important.
Second of all, nation should expend more money for the development of the athletics as it can make a nation glorious. For example, once I have visited Australia and during my travel, a native asked me that from where you have come from. I answered that I am from Bangladesh and then he replied if it is a part of India? I answered negatively that it is an independent country. Suddenly, a man beside us interrupted us and states that you are from the country of Sakib Al Hasan, the number one all-rounder in the world, and then I exclaimed with joy that yes, that is my country. The example illustrates us that athletics is important because it represents a nation to the world and a good athlete can make a nation proud.
In conclusion, whether government will spend more money in support of the arts or in supports of the athletics is a complex issue because art is also important for the development of a nation. However, to me, I believe that athletics is more important, so the government should spend more money in support of athletics than the support of arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, then, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88179669031 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88589646644 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442080378251 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8791243505 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.722222222 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322466976131 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109856471395 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148757888667 0.0737576698707 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264472581841 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.180093650068 0.0645574589148 279% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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