Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today the world is too much competitive. People are engaged in competition in their different stages of life. Some people say that the rule for the young people to follow in this age is not stringent. However, I agree with the statement, and I think that the societies expect from the young generation to follow and obey strict rules and regulations . My position is based on two obvious reasons.
Firstly, children are now too busy with their study, and parents force them to study all day long. Children are not free and they are constrained by tons of rules and regulations both in their families and schools. The worst part of the present parenting is that instead of their children, they are in the competition of their children's grades.I remember the taxing and tiring schedule of my primary and high school life. I had to get up at six o clock and had to prepare for my mathematics tutor, then taking breakfast I had to go to my school. There were listless numbers of rules in the schools, which I followed. After schools I needed to go to my science coaching, then I came back to my house around five p.m. After taking bath and lunch, I was permitted to take rest, and after that I used to sit in my reading table for the preparation for the next day. This was the common schedule of a student and now this scene is becoming worse. The example illustrates us that not just the young people the children are compelled to follow a strict and weary rules in the society. Hence, the societies expect that young generation should follow strict rules.
Secondly, young matured people in this civilized world go to the job for their living. young people are becoming like a robot. Every day, the lifestyle of an employee is same and here, there is also a hard rule for the young. One need to get up at the morning, then should prepare himself or herself for the job. Then that person will leave the house for the job for eight hours. In the office there are countless rules and regulation for the employees and they need to follow those rules very strictly, otherwise, the company will fire them. After office, people comeback to sweet home and there some assignment for the home also and at the end of all of these, they go to bed and prepare themselves for the same cycle and same rules. The word is now civilized and the irony is this civilization is measured by the rules and regulations. The society, which impose more strict rules, are more civilized. The discussion shows us that the society expect us to follow its strict rules and regulation, specially for the young people. Thus, today societies expect us to follow the strict rules in every aspect of our life.
In conclusion, in some societies there may be scope to act liberally for the young people, but it is now clear that in most of the societies the rules and regulations for the young people are strict and stringent. Therefore, in my view, the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, i think, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2466.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57513914657 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40675489733 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432282003711 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3416145834 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3333333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.962962963 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85185185185 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301065429543 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105030651168 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121394466729 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254243816305 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100997892625 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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