Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The prompt states that some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom, and other believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning. I strongly agree with the second group of the people and argue that competition for high grades seriously hampers the quality of real learning.
Firstly, the procedure for real learning and the procedure for getting higher grades is different. In most of the cases getting higher grades have the shortcut ways, but for real learning there is no shortcut technique. For example, there are many guides in the market, which are designed for the high grade. In those guides, only the answers for particular questions are provided and just memorzing those answers a student can aces in the classrooms. This type of memorizing technique will not help the students to get the real learnig of a particular topic. The students should prepare the answers of the questions in their own by reading the topic, but this answers may not be as sophisticated as those guide. For this reason, student's own answers will nor get a high grade, which will lead a student to follow those guide and the memorizing technique. The example shows us that the competition for high grade demotivate the students to follow the real and authentic learnig procedue, and motivate students to follow some shortcuts. Thus, competition of high grades precludes the process of real learnig.
Secondly, in some cases the competitions make the students depressed and motivate the students to follow illegal way. When a student get lower grades in exam, he become depressed because his or her friends or parents will criticize him or her. Because of this depression the student may not like the academic life and later he or she may not continue study. In some cases, students follow illegal ways to get high grades. For examples, there are lot of student who copy in the exam, which is batantly an illegal action for a students. In some cases, student select the course teachers as thier home tutor and in return, those teacher help the studets to get a high grade by giving short suggestions. Ther examples, shows us that competitions make students depressed and in some cases it teaches the students to follow illegal ways. An real education never motivate a students to follow an illegal way.
In conclusion, competions for high grades may motivate students to do well in the classroom, but cannot guarantee the quality of the learnig. Therefore, for the obvious reason, competition for high grades seriouly limits the quality of real learning
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'ace', 'ax'
Suggestion: ace; ax
...t memorzing those answers a student can aces in the classrooms. This type of memoriz...
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Line 5, column 524, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...which is batantly an illegal action for a students. In some cases, student select the cour...
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Line 5, column 621, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this teacher' or 'those teachers'?
Suggestion: this teacher; those teachers
...hers as thier home tutor and in return, those teacher help the studets to get a high grade by...
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Line 5, column 833, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'A' instead of 'An' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: A
...es the students to follow illegal ways. An real education never motivate a student...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
... ways. An real education never motivate a students to follow an illegal way. In conclus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02064220183 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58301587377 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.410550458716 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3493738458 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.238095238 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7619047619 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402762781126 0.243740707755 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146747254973 0.0831039109588 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125682424605 0.0758088955206 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.315717199351 0.150359130593 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140534569659 0.0667264976115 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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