Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some poeple say that life was easier, simple, and comfortable when their grandparents were children. However, I do not agree with this view. I believe that life at present situation of the world is easier, and more comfortable. My position is based on two reasons.
First of all, the communication system inhanced drastically due to dramatic improvement of the science and technology. During our grandparent's childhood the communication system was so bad that they suffered a lot. I have listened a lot of stories of their travail due to the poor condition of communication system, such as when my grandfather was student, his school was eight kilometers away from the house, and he needed to walk all the way of it, and for this reason, my grandmother never went to school. Moreover, our grandparents got important news after many days, weeks, or months. Whereas, we are now blessed with the sophisticated commutication system. For examples, we can travel hundred of miles in an hour by a bullet train or aeroplane. We can communicate with every parts of the world just in second. We have now internet, where we can send emails, texts and important informations just by a punch on our cell phone. Smartphones make our life more easier. For instances, we can buy, whatever we want, from the emarket, we do not need to go bank anymore because of ebanking. These examples shows us that we can live our life easily and comfortively. Thus, the improved communication and technology our life become easier and more comfortable.
Secondly, we are now able to fight against the strongest diseases. Medical science improved a lot in last few decades and now, capable to cure may complex diseases. When our grandparents were children then many people died by very simple diseases. I remember, my grandmother used to say that she lost her parents and brothers just because of cholera, but now, cholera is curable, and it is a very simple disease. Cancer was uncurable few years age, and today, we get the effective treatments for the cancers. Improvement of vaccines erradicates many dangerous diseases like, chicken pox, plague, hepatitis-B, and so on. These examples illustrate us that development of the medical science help us to live more comfortively. Hence, our life become easier and more comfortable than our grandparent's childhood.
In coclusion, comperision between the life of past and present is very difficult, but I believe that due to advancement of science and technology our life become easy going. Therefore, at the present condition of the world the life become easier and more comfortable than the time when our grandparents were child.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...news after many days, weeks, or months. Whereas, we are now blessed with the sophistica...
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Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...r cell phone. Smartphones make our life more easier. For instances, we can buy, whatever we...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
..., capable to cure may complex diseases. When our grandparents were children then man...
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Suggestion:
...rtable than our grandparents childhood. In coclusion, comperision between the li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05239179954 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95321313511 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526195899772 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.4903324275 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3076923077 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8846153846 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73076923077 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220659780051 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685424967476 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737216132142 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173134567664 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068192500088 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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