Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Given that the dire economic circumstances in many societies, making decision about which part of the society should give more support is very challenging. Some people hold a negative perspective toward any assistance from the government for supporting artists, while others believe that sports teams don’t require additional support from the government. I subscribe to this group and I think artists deserve to get more fund.
To begin with, art could be a very great source for the whole society to alleviate their stress and anxiety by use of it. In fact, with any financial support from the government in the art works, the majority of the society even with low income would have the chance of contributing in art, which leads to a more tranquil and peaceful society. As an illustration, with the government’s help for music bands, the concerts’ tickets will cost lower than usual. As a result, everyone could afford to be in that concerts, and enjoy the live music instead of staying at home and watching music from television. This could provide a low-cost source of entertainment which is lucrative for families to have delightful moments together. This example demonstrates how it is important that the government focus in the art field, in order to have happier society.
Moreover, many private sponsors comply to support sports teams, which is beneficial for both sports team and the sponsor. In this case, the government should not consider spending money for that teams. For instance, all the football teams in my country, Iran, have a corporation to financially support them. The corporation’s logo is printed on the athlete’s shirt which is a kind of advertisement, and reciprocally they spend money for that team to thrive. The football team has received all kind of champions they need, the hotel for their practice trips, their extra cloths and so forth. Hence, there is no concern remained for the government to pay attention to.
To put it in a nutshell, I firmly believe that artists need more monetary support from the government than athletics. With more assistant given to art works, the majority of people in the society could enjoy them and release their pressures. In addition, it is not of necessitate that the government spend money for athletes because many local and private companies give the required support to the sports teams.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, furthermore, hence, so, therefore, well, while, i think, in addition, in fact, no doubt, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17886178862 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66813144163 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536585365854 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9117007289 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209943623071 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688978897906 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557299420395 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145035092357 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141196646198 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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