Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money supporting the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the accelerating development of our society, arts and athletics play two essential roles in our daily life; It is hard to judge which has more significance. Simultaneously, some people are the advocators for governments that spend more funds supporting the arts; many believe athletics is worth more attention and investment. What should be more regarded for budget allocation is a matter of controversy. From my perspective, I am not at all convinced that the government spend more money on supporting arts. The essay will illustrate why.
First of all, physical activities provide us with golden opportunities that reinforce us to have a more healthy lifestyle, which is the most critical necessity after housing, education, and nutrition. On the other hand, the arts are the second human need that had better be considered after all conditions mentioned above. High- level sports teams encourage individuals to enhance great enthusiasm for such a healthy lifestyle. The more Olympic teams gain success, the more people incentivize to do sports activities; hence, the society will win one of the most critical body requirements leading to disease prevention and higher-level energy to accomplish other life-goals. For instance, depression and anxiety have been proved to have a clear association with the sedentary lifestyle. Ergo supporting international Olympic teams reinforce people's physical health intensely.
Let's talk about why we do not spend more fund on the art; Spots are highly educational, while art skills are not appropriate to education. It is known that arts are somehow obscure and pluralistic. An artwork may contain different and multiple-meaning. Some reflect the dark side of society, which is too early for the children to know, and teenagers without the right directions would imitate some.
What's more, there is a saying that 'artists are inspired by suffering.' Vincent Van Gogh was the best example. He lived cleanly and poorly, with no money, no woman, or applause. While Micheal Jordan was hiring beautiful naked models dancing in the studio, Vincent has no money to hire models, so he can only paint toward the mirror, again and again, alone and bitter artists can figure their spirit on the paper, in their work we read more than beauty, but although, an attitude, an era. A professor said, 'poverty is the mentor of the mind and a tutor of style.' It makes spirit and mental to be indifferent toward fame and fortune.
To maximize profit, governments tend to invest money on a more profitable project. If we support the same cash on an art exhibition or a sports competition, it would be straightforward to tell that the sports competition will attract more audience and draw more attention. Unfortunately, if a country was involved in a war, the museums and art galleries are very likely to be destroyed; still, the Olympics returned a year after that.
Finally, the relation between artists and athletes is interactive; Athletes represent the national physical strength; artists represent the national mental strength. Neither of them is unimportant. But as for a country, We need our people physically strong first; we hope to let the athletes be good examples. When we see our athletes fight against the rivals, we feel uniform, a kind of national cohesion. Sports will become a satisfying culture if we treat it seriously. Olympic sports will be the right symbol of liberty and united community.
In conclusion, with the abovementioned reasons, governments had better spend more funds supporting Olympic teams; all people take advantage of the program, and national triumph contributing to the whole social spirit get improved. Sport is the most vital necessity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, second, so, still, thus, while, after all, as for, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3138.0 1977.66487455 159% => OK
No of words: 600.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93368161197 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 338.0 212.727598566 159% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563333333333 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 975.6 618.680645161 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 13.0 3.08781362007 421% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0394629945 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.225806452 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3548387097 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06451612903 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236419010406 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543953548325 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057293459548 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117221260595 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632157712262 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 165.0 86.8835125448 190% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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