Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Job has a more significant effect on your overall than social life dies

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Job has a more significant effect on your overall than social life dies.

Either job or social life has more impact on an individual's happiness? Perhaps one of the most commercial issues in today's society. But, despite various responses people may have, I, given a chance, would agree that a job affects more.

First, work renders us immerse happiness in the economic part and buys us happiness. Besides the essential living items we purchase with work payment, Money raises life quality. Delicious food we buy deliveries taste joy, the journal we paid for hides surprise, and Spa we try to give us relax. Even a lot of people are skeptical about Money's effect. However, a survey conducted by examining over 30,000 questionnaires reveals that Money is the most concerning factor in one's daily life, topping other choices. Meanwhile, Money helps to realize our pursuit and dream. With the financial support, a young man invests own business, and an older adult goes to college for further education. All the dreams come true based on what work equipped us.

Secondly, work also impacts our mental state. Some people may say it is not only Money that defines happiness. Indeed, working satisfaction matters too. Feel respected, own autonomy, and fulfill tasks in the working time that occupies more than half of our awake period, make us feel recognized and needed by society. The fact that a person out of employment always feels lost proves the opposing side. A friend of mine is hard to sleep in the night during the period she lost her job and suddenly is curled up the next day after being hired. Further, by emerging portable appliances, work can reach individuals anywhere and anytime, reinforcing work's role in life. The person out of the office is working by laptop, the person out of town can be reached by blackberry, and even the astronomer, who is out of the earth, is still working.
Nevertheless, I am not ruling social life out of essential factors in life. Sometimes social life has turned out to be an extension of a job. For example, check how many people in the mobile contact list are known to work.

In conclusion. Positively or negatively, work has a more significant influence on happiness. Passion-filled people draw satisfaction from their work. People whose jobs fund diverse life experiences receive pleasure indirectly from their work. Those whose work encroaches on their personal lives also have their happiness impacted, albeit negatively. Labor has a more robust connection to personal satisfaction than a social life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09223300971 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66676779744 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616504854369 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8671145897 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.7037037037 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2592592593 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48148148148 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152975179861 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445320636129 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600531994184 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103938818416 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504966359982 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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