Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

A commonly held belief is that governments are responsible to provide art facilities for people in the society to improve people's artistic accomplishment. However, some may claim that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics. This essay holds the agreed view of the first opinion .
First of all, since art has made many attributions to human being, government really need to focus on how to protect achievements of ancient human civilization in order to let modern people understand the wisdom of the ancients, increase the sense of cultural identity.Besides, artistic cultural activities have become a part of people’s daily life, for example, not only more and more kids or students prefer to visit museums and art galleries these days but also some senior citizen. Therefore, governments should spend more money in support of arts because the government is an aggregate of the people and needs to serve them wholeheartedly.
Secondly, Art can help people relieve pressure and release the tension in their heart. In today’s fast-paced society, people need art to slow them down so that they can enjoy the beauty of nature and life. For instance, many people said that they feel relaxed when they look at Leonardo da Vinci's painting, Mona Lisa.
To conclude, governments should take active parts in support of arts rather than athletics. It is not only for the pleasant life of modern people in the society but also contribute to the future of all mankind.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 249.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12048192771 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79914558392 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59437751004 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 116.387112689 48.9658058833 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 127.5 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1 5.45110844103 240% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206919198736 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105262322101 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128513902397 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14654567434 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859077768832 0.0645574589148 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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