Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Without a shadow of a doubt, arts and sports are two essential entertainment pillar industries upon the development of the economy. A glance at people's attitude towards the government investment brings to a light question that has been asked several times, namely, should the government spend more money in support of arts, or athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Were I forced to choose, I would prefer the latter point of view to the former one and I will thoroughly elaborate on what rationale my perspective is based on.
The first reason worth mentioning is sports industry is more powerful in boosting economic growth. To illustrate more, compared with arts, sports is more attractive and suitable for the public, which means they can be more aware of the existence of an athletic team rather than an art organization. Simultaneously, a state-sponsored sports team can either attract more investments in public fitness programs or be wholesome to generate the honor of being a citizen in this unique city. Take the example of OKC Thunder, an NBA basketball team as a compelling example. As the only sports team of 4 major alliances in the city, Thunder's tickets are on the brink of being sold out every game day. More than 20 thousand citizens gather together to cheer not only for this team but also for their city's spirit. As a result of Thunder's success, many programs which are the name of it had been flourish in this city, which brought hundreds of jobs and contributed to the growth of the economy.
Another reason that I hold this opinion is that a state-sponsored team can be a business card on behalf of the city. There is numerous famous sports team which are located in some really small cities, and the way people from all over the world get to know these cities is to be familiar with those sports team. According to this propagation, a sports team can attract uncountable tourists to visit the city where it lives, and bring tourism revenue and promote cultural communication in the same vein.
A voice arises that investing in the art industry may be a better choice because it seems more profitable than the sports industry because some sports teams can not make both ends meet. However, this claim needs to be scrutinized meticulously. In fact, the sports market is much more mature than the art market, which means it can be managed more efficiently and easily. Sports groups like NBA, NFL, MBL are all successful examples that effectively illustrate the successful operation of a sports team. On the other side, some investments in arts may not be as successful as in sports, for some genres are so obscure for the public to understand.
In conclusion, drawing upon the reasons I have mentioned above, I think governments should spend more money in support of athletics. While there are one thousand Hamlets in one thousand people's eyes, I believe my opponents will yield upon after being shown to my article.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 116, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...cause it seems more profitable than the sports industry because some sports teams can ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, really, so, while, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86878727634 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74028677523 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530815109344 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.2160604306 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.45 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.15 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212454697079 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678569189484 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773000000733 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12692343041 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456131207499 0.0645574589148 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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