Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

As art and sport are both very important pieces of our society and governments are obliged to support them. There have been discussions about whether governments should put their funding more towards the development of art or sport. Some people urge that more money should be put in to support art related industries and public sections.

it is true that art, as the practice of human creativity and cultural communication, can not only boost intellectual and cultural development of the nation, but also bring with substantial economic benefits, for example, the tremendous profit booming movie industry, or the huge revenue generated from popular music concerts. However, in my opinion, it is still more beneficial for government to lean more towards support for athletics, because it has been proven by facts that development of sports industries and causes has much bigger economic profits, as well as much widely influences on general public.

First, more support in sports can create greater economic benefits. Nowadays, operations of sports causes are no longer non-profitable. On the contrary, sports have become more and more industrialized and commercialized. industrialized sport causes have the potential to stimulate economic growth of many different industries. like the famous national football League (nfl) of and national Basketball Association (NBA), both host commercial sport events on a national scale. such industrialized operation involves great volume and variety of economic interactions with other participates of the market. For example, in the operation of nfl games, contractors are needed to insure the construction and maintenance of football stadiums, media companies are involved for on-air coverage and advertisements, manufacturers of different sectors are also brought in to provide numerous kinds of nfl name-brand products, like uniforms and souvenirs…etc. All those activities have generated huge revenue and great amount of job opportunities, and they are all triggered by a single sport business. In this case, if government can take advantage of such trend, put more money to support the development of sports industries, it can for sure promote bigger economic growth in all connecting industries.

Second, governments support in sports can stimulate its people to pursue healthier lifestyles. On one hand, apart from any final effect of implementation, government behaviors have direct influence on people’s value choice, a government focus on support of sports sends out a strong signal to general public to encourage people to participate more in sports activities. On the other hand, government fund can be used to improve sports infrastructures and facilities in communities. With more spaces, better conditions and more varieties, people can enjoy sports in a more convenient yet interesting way.

In conclusion, I think it is more advantageous for the government to put in more money to support sports.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61197339246 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18596498862 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523281596452 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.1105847374 48.9658058833 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.210526316 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7368421053 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36842105263 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193062970485 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783708161168 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642528166566 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149951781242 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595048403072 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 10.9000537634 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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