Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Governmental support is very important for the improvement of any project or event. In addition to that, it gives the authority to this project which will benefit both parts. In the consideration of where the government should spend more money, I think that the government should spend more money in support of the athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams than in support arts.
First, athletic event increases the over all well-being of the community by encouraging people to exercise and practice these sports. For example, my younger son was a lazy boy with pre-diabetic health condition due to his weight; he was almost 15 kg over weight. Last year, he started to watch the olympics, and he began to be interested in practising many kinds of sports. Following, his activity increased and his health improved. Now, he is part of our country olympic team. Moreover, his blood glucose level is back to normal.
Second, athletics team is a reflection of the country infront of other countries in the international events. teams can give an impression about their culture and traditions. For instance, when my son was in germany, he attended a German traditional party. he told me that this party teaches him a lot about germany, and he added that our country is preparing for a similar event to introduce our culture in the next olympics. Thats why I believe that with the government support this event will be better and can include more countries .
In my opinion, people health and the country image are essential things for all od us, and I think that arts do not have that much effect on our community, so I agree that the government support should go to the athletics. In other hand, I suggest that part of this support has to go to kids activities. In fact, healthy kids mean healthy adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, moreover, second, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85161290323 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73963286561 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567741935484 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2402620849 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4705882353 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248830894892 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718268926742 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125465196367 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169636226722 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141722734321 0.0645574589148 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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