TPO53
Do you agree or disagree?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation.
It is undeniable that the governments have to spend money to improve the country and it's facilities, but where they have to spend the money? Or what are the priorities of the governments in spending money? In my view, it is more important for governments to spend money to improve public transportation than to improve Internet access.
First, public transportation is a facility needed by all kind of people regardless of their age or wealth. When the government improves the puplic transportation, it helps higher number of people. For instance, I live in a suburb next to chicago. my work is in chicago, and it is 45 minute away from my house by train. Last year, some technical issues happened to the train. On that day, arriving to my work by a taxi took me two hours because of the traffic. my manager was very angry because I am late and I almost lost a customer because of that. I am sure that this issue affected at least hundreds of people. that's why I think it is very important for the government to spend money in improving public transportation.
Second, improving the internet access should be the resbonsability of the private section since it is not an essential thing for the servival of the humen. For example, I went to an island for a vacation with my family. after we arrived, we were surprised that there were no internet connection there. my brother was very angry as he wanted to watch his series. we spent a week there. we had a fantastic family time. Consequently, we concluded that even if internet was not available, we could have a good time. In fact, this was my brother conclusion after he said that he got the best vacation ever.
To sum up, spending money in improving public transportation is more important for the government not only because it is crucial for people life, but also it serves high number of people. In addition to that, I suggest that this improvement has to be routinely so nothing will affect the daily movement of the transportation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, as to, at least, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, kind of, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66193181818 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85373100851 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9071494661 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5909090909 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95454545455 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352429700893 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102220113137 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154900342085 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255370133278 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.160973333472 0.0645574589148 249% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.