TPO53
Do you agree or disagree?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation.
In one side, cummuters believe that, publice transportation is a necessary topic in every country, and they propose to improve it. On the other side, some people make a opposite point, and they want the government improve internet access. I firmly assert second point carries high weight, and I use following reasons to support my position.
For the beginning, as you know education is important topict in every country, and students should improve themselves. one of the most important way which students can improve themselves is a using internet because students have to compete with all students in the world, and recently a lot of useful documents are uploaded on the net, so if students have a speed net, they will be able to use these documents to improve themselves. In addition, nowadays some online courses are held on the net, so people who are celever but busy, can use the net for taking online courses.
Additionally, recently online shops have created on the net, and it has more benefit for people. Since people have become more busy, some of them do not have enought time for shopping, but in this way they can lie on the coach, serft the net, and buy their favorite items by one click. On the other hand, some peopel who have a part time job can sell something online, and earn money. so, it has a benefit for tow groups of people.
As a result, I believe that, internet access is more important than public transportation becasue of more benefits, and in my opinion the government should spent money to imptove it. Were I in charge, I would do it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...it. On the other side, some people make a opposite point, and they want the gover...
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Suggestion: One
...and students should improve themselves. one of the most important way which student...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... courses are held on the net, so people who are celever but busy, can use the net for t...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... the other hand, some peopel who have a part time job can sell something online, and earn...
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Suggestion: So
... sell something online, and earn money. so, it has a benefit for tow groups of peo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e. As a result, I believe that, internet access is more important than p...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve it. Were I in charge, I would do it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, in addition, you know, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 276.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77536231884 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52475664872 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532608695652 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.7889566874 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.833333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226438901999 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852378771 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853348857309 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145972005516 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698445796884 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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