TPO53
Do you agree or disagree?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to public transportation.
Our government’s decisions are one of the important factors in our society. Genuinely, they have an undeniable role in our future. This issue whether or not where the authority should invest money has engendered copious controversies among people. Although a certain conclusion cannot be made, I, to a great extent, hold this viewpoint that government’s investment should be in the improvement of public transportation. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that in the present time, people spend a great deal of their precious time in traffic. It means that they lose some part of their lives without doing any useful activities. Furthermore, if public transportation facilities such as buses are not available, individuals have to use their own cars, which means that they must spend more money thanks to the high expense of the fuel. To shed more light on this matter, consider a man who works in a company, which is far from his flat, and has to commute every day. Therefore, he must wake up earlier in the morning because of the traffic. Additionally, he has to spend a hoard of money to buy fuel for his vehicle. Hence, not only is he not be able to use his time effectively but also he will lose some money. As it is clear, the more improvement of public transportation, the more benefit human beings will gain.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that nowadays, the level of air pollution, which is the main cause of numerous diseases, is very high. If public transportation be available, the air pollution will reduce, the air will become cleaner, and as a result, people will become healthier and the amount of money that they have to spend on the remedial action, will decrease too. For instance, a research that has been conducted by some scientists in my country has shown that in the areas where the air contamination is more that its standards, human beings become more sick than the other regions. Therefore, it is highly recommended that governments make an attempt to improve public transportations accessibility.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that it can be more advantages for all individuals if authority invest on improvement of public transportation. This contention is due to this importance that by doing so not only will the amount of traffic reduce but also the level of air pollution will decrease too. As you can see, these kinds of investments are more lucrative for human beings.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...deniable role in our future. This issue whether or not where the authority should invest money...
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Line 2, column 891, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ose some money. As it is clear, the more improvement of public transportation, th...
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Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...ction, will decrease too. For instance, a research that has been conducted by some scienti...
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Line 3, column 729, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'transportations'' or 'transportation's'?
Suggestion: transportations'; transportation's
...ments make an attempt to improve public transportations accessibility. To make a long story ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e public transportations accessibility. To make a long story short, based on the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2289.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92258064516 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96569510217 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509677419355 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2840618985 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.45 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241024152698 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731603908404 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610867786646 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148548839023 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024552548678 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.