TPO47
do you agree or disagree?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Every day, numerous phenomena are happening all over the world. This issue weather people have to be aware of these events or not has engendered copious controversies among people. Although a certain conclusion cannot be made, in spite of all undeniable merits of having knowledge about them, I, to a great extent, hold this viewpoint that it is unnecessary to know about this kind of phenomena. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that; definitely, trying to know these events is not a good use of time since they will not affect your life. This claim is thanks to the fact that different people do not do identical things in the same situation. Therefore, for example, if you are aware of an event, which happened in another country before, and know its results, it is unlikely that you react like people who were in that situation and have experienced this event before. Hence, having knowledge about these events, people will lose their precious time, and it will not be beneficial.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that there are a host of events happening all over the world in each moment. Therefore, it is impossible for an individual to follow all of them. On the other hand, people cannot realize that which one is more important and can be helpful in their lives. Since, recognizing significant events is an infeasible task, making attempts to recognize all event just makes people feel confused and nervous. For example, a research conducted by some scientists in my country has shown that almost 70 percent of people who do not follow events, are more calm and can take better decisions. As it is clear, it is more productive for individuals to not be aware of happening phenomena.
To make a long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that it can be more advantageous for people not to be informed of event happening around the world. This conclusion is due to this importance that by doing so not only will they use their time better but also having information about all events is not possible. Therefore, people should not know these events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'hosts'?
Suggestion: hosts
... about this importance that there are a host of events happening all over the world ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, kind of, in spite of, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85396039604 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63068743315 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514851485149 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8493991189 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.352941176 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7647058824 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227609854442 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072896324026 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059057414114 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152293651875 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579489998881 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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