TPO32
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of the society as whole.
In each country, the number of young adult is one of the most crucial factors in that nation. Genuinely, the young determine that how much a society is successful. Although a plethora of individuals hold the opinion that young people have an influential and tremendous impact on future of the society, others disagree with this point of view. I, to a great extent, hold the viewpoint that they have an important effect on vital decisions. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that the young are the power and the pillars that will guide our nation toward progress, and all the governments are aware of this importance. They are more knowledgeable rather than persons who lived in the past; hence they are be able to make impeccable decisions and improve their future. Therefore, governments allow them to give their notions and have influence on decisions, which are related to the future. To shed more light on this matter, consider a university student. In the present time, he can give his ideas about everything without any limitation or fear about the government’s reaction. Furthermore, he has an excellent access to a hosts of information sources such as the internet, social networks and so forth; therefore, his decisions are not erroneous since they are based on that information. As it is clear, the more young adult take decisions, the best results will be gain in the future.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that in almost all countries, young people have a right to vote. In other words, individuals who are 18 years old or older, are be able to take part in the elections and select their choice. Thanks to that right, they have an undeniable role in the society and their influence on the future is vitally important. To give a tangible example, the noteworthy statistics revealed by a recently conducted research in the Massachusetts Institute of Technology (MIT) shown that 18 years old people are mentally mature enough to take important decisions. Therefore, young adults play an important role in all nations.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that young people are be able to verify the future. This contention is due to the fact that not only are they more aware rather than they were before, but also they have some rights that enable them to affect the future. Consequently, none of the nations can deny the young’s influence on the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...s who lived in the past; hence they are be able to make impeccable decisions and i...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'excellent access'.
Suggestion: excellent access
...nt's reaction. Furthermore, he has an excellent access to a hosts of information sources such ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a host' or simply 'hosts'?
Suggestion: a host; hosts
...thermore, he has an excellent access to a hosts of information sources such as the inte...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ht to vote. In other words, individuals who are 18 years old or older, are be able to t...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...uals who are 18 years old or older, are be able to take part in the elections and ...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recently conducted research'.
Suggestion: recently conducted research
..., the noteworthy statistics revealed by a recently conducted research in the Massachusetts Institute of Techn...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...aw the conclusion that young people are be able to verify the future. This content...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, such as, in other words, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2250.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91266375546 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74656173799 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515283842795 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1689562863 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227444679454 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070484630577 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603035029002 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142633245764 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510024668544 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.