Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
government support is an important thing in many events and activities. it gives the authority in addition to the financial support. In response, when considering where the government should spend more money, I think that it should spend more money to support athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams rather than arts.
First, athletics teams have noticeable effect on the over all comunity health. In fact, it encourages people to exercise more, so if the government supports athletics teams, people well being and health will improve. For instance, my brother was a lazy, fat and pre-diabetic kid. my parents tried to improve his condition but nothing worked with him. However, when he started to watch the olympic games, he was very excited, and he started to exercise. Now, he is part of the country olympic team, his weight is back to normal, and his glucose levels are within the range.
Second, athletics affect the country image in front of other countries, and they have a great chance to enhance the tourism in our country. With the government authority this effect will increase and will be more official. For example, my brother traveled to german, France and England during the olympics. he was able to learn about their culture. In the other hand he gives a good idea about our traditions to his friends. Next week, we are preparing to welcome his german friend and his family in our city, and to go with them in a fantastic tour around the state.
I do not believe that the arts have that much effect. health and countries connection are essential for our life, that's why I agree that the government should spend more money to support athletics than to support arts. Moreover I suggest that some of this support should go to kids sport to prevent many health issues that could start early at the age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87220447284 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48397573479 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568690095847 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4070429985 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7222222222 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3888888889 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341770268834 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958467490349 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13502975251 0.0737576698707 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249698120533 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.188187720213 0.0645574589148 292% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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