People learn things better from those at their own level- such as fellow students or co workers- than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
Learning is essential in our life to be able to servive the fast changing that we face. In fact, it is very important to get the information from the right person. In my view, people learn things better from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors than from those at their own level.
First, teachers usually know more than fellow students, so when people learn from them, they will get complete information. For instance, last month, my brother Rami was sick. He missed many classes from his university. He said that he is going to ask the professor to repeat them for him, but his friend offered to teach him instead. Rami accepted that. Unfortunately, he learned from his friend view which means he did not have all the information. That is why he failed his test last week.
Second, supervisors or teachers have an experience in teaching. They have more creative ways to make students understand any topic. For example, when my second brother Sami was an intern in CVS pharmacy, and he faced a difficulty in learning how to use the computer system, his Co-worker tried to help him and show him how to do it, but still he did not get it. After a week of trying without any result, he asked his supervisor about it. She was very friendly, and she teaches him with patient. At first, she explained they way that their computer works, then she gave him an examples, and at the end she supervised him in two or three cases to make sure that he can do it. sami now is the best intern in using the pharmacy computer system, and he is expecting to be assigned for a full time job position next month due to his good performance.
To sum up, I think people should learn from their teachers, professors, and supervisors not only because they know better about things, but also they are experts in teaching. Moreover, I suggest that they have to offer extra hours for students and employees, so they can ask questions about anything they do not know.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an example' or simply 'examples'?
Suggestion: an example; examples
...their computer works, then she gave him an examples, and at the end she supervised him in t...
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Line 3, column 784, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...nd he is expecting to be assigned for a full time job position next month due to his good...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, then, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54802259887 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45418942634 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553672316384 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3871291188 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7368421053 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6315789474 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280225872379 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849149513105 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.178733807288 0.0737576698707 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214229581603 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.21788658671 0.0645574589148 338% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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