Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
It is undeniable that education is essential for raising a successful and happy kids. I think educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend more so much time on phone, online games, and social networking Web site. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, social media has an addictive effect, it makes kids want to watch video after video and post after post without stopping. They do not regognize the time they lost until it is too late. After that, they will not have enough energy to start studying. For instance, my younger brother is ten years old. he came from his school and spent almost seven hours at his cell phone scrolling Facebook videos. At 8:00 pm, he told my mother that he is very tired, and he is not going to do his homeworks.
Second, online games are very attractive for children, and have an endless levels, which means players will not ever finish the game. It will be impossible for parents to stop them from playing and force them to study. On the other hand, people on the past used to play at specific time after the sunset, that means they spent their time after school by studying and doing their homeworks. For example, when my mother was at school. She did not have any electronic games or a cell phone, so after she came back from school, she had her lunch, and she started studying. After sunset, she went to the park to play for half an hour with her siblings, then she went back to complete her education process.
In conclusion, I strongely believe that educating children is more difficult than it was in the past. This is because of an addictive effect of social media and an endless online game, that make a big distraction for kids from studying. That is why I suggest that parent should only give their children cell phones after they became 16 years old, and allow them to play electronic games only for one hour per day.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, then, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49720670391 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21180373856 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525139664804 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0994352789 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4444444444 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311970805563 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098928510958 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150789904212 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227574642683 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147566331157 0.0645574589148 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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