Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
It is critically important for children to have proper education. Now a days, educating them is becoming more difficult than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking website. I strongely agree with that for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, social media and online games have an addictive effect. For example, people cannot stop scrolling Facebook videos or winning new levels of an online game. When children start doing this, it will be very dangerous on them, and it will affect their educating process. For instance, my younger brother Sami is a ten years old student, who comes back from his school every day at 1:00 pm, but rather than starts doing his homework after eating his lunch, he spends five hours playing on his I-pad. This makes hime very tired, so he tells my mother that he is not going to study for this day. My mother always tell me that teaching me was easier than him because I did not use cell phone or I-pad at a young age.
Second, these technologies make children distracted, confussed, and not able to concentrate on their study. For example, even if my brother starts doing his homework earlier, he still will not be able to focus on what my mother trying to teach him. Moreover, he can remember what his teacher said in the class room because he was thinking about how to win a game. However, people at my age used to have less destractions and clearer minds, which help us to have smoother educating process.
In conclusion, I think that educating children is more difficult task today than it was before because they waste their time on cell phones, which have an addictive effect, and are a big destraction for them. That is why I suggest that parent should only allow their kids to use phones, I-pads and computers on weekends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
... for children to have proper education. Now a days, educating them is becoming more diffic...
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Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
... children to have proper education. Now a days, educating them is becoming more diffic...
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Line 2, column 624, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tudy for this day. My mother always tell me that teaching me was easier than him ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63746223565 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35647610186 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595166163142 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6937231487 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290069671149 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965630419261 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122091018541 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207920743733 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131951323791 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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