Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
it is certain that the number of endangered animals is increasing. if people keep being unaware of that, animals at risk are going to extinct. some think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for these animals. In my view, I strongly disagree with that.
First, the role of humans on this Earth is to keep and to take care of it. if they give the priority for their needs, they will lose a lot of the land's beauty. For instance, millions years ago, people depended on hunting to find their source of food. At the same time, there were many colorful birds. they had beautiful shapes with musical voices, but due to severe killing, these birds disappeared, and we lost their tweets forever.
Second, saving animal's land has nothing to do with human needs. people can do both of them together. For example, china is a big country. it has the highest population. it is also very active in the industry field. many of products that we daily use are made in china. In contrast, it has an organization to help in protecting Pandas from extinction. it save their land, treat them, and offer them food in case of it's deficiency.
To sum up, I think it is more important to save land for endangered animals than to fulfill human needs. it is not only because this is our role in the life, but also we will lose some beauty from our land.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1137.0 1977.66487455 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 251.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52988047809 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31629368283 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589641434263 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3500086718 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 59.8421052632 100.406767564 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.2105263158 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348674127191 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936568302466 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108261806477 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223687250315 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105931399777 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 11.7677419355 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.11 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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