Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Citizens are always concerned about how their governments use the revenue and they have the right to do so. Recently, there have been a heated debate on governments are supposed to spend more their budget on the area of arts or athletics. Personally, I believe athletics outweighs the arts, especially considering the following reasons.
To begin with, the fund on sports are more effective to arose people\'s national pride than that of the arts. Seeing the Olympic team from their own countries win gold medals will definitely enhance citizens\' national pride. But the process of winning the championship can be very tough, requiring not only the hard training of athletes but also the strong support from their teams. The strong support, however, needs a large amount of money, which is unbearable for an individual or a private organization. Therefore, it is undoubtedly their governments\' responsibility to offer the money, or the pursuit of winning gold medals would just be a dream. In contrast, although art works are also able to fulfill this goal, the process is just much more unpredictable than that of athletics. This is because the evaluation of art works bases more on culture, which is different in different countries. However, the standard of sports competition is much simpler; whoever wins the first place gets the championship. Thus, if a government wants to strengthen the national pride of its people, giving more fund on athletics is certainly more effective.
Furthermore, allocating more budget on athletics can inspire the public to participate in taking exercise, which is beneficial to their health condition. Nowadays, as the technology of Internet develops rapidly, people tend to fall in the sedentary lifestyle, which has actually weaken their physical health. In order to change this situation, authorities should come up with some solutions. When people see the sportsmen from their countries win international matches, some of them will be motivated to take part in sports events. For instance, it is the great success of the Chinese table tennis that make Chinese citizens be more enthusiasitic on joining table tennis activities. In recent decades, it can be seen that people are playing table tennis almost everywhere in China, which should be attributed to the outstanding performance of the Chinese national team of table tennis.
In a nutshell, with these factors above, I insist that authorities should spend more money to support athletics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
...sedentary lifestyle, which has actually weaken their physical health. In order to chan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27959697733 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87887832489 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556675062972 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.6484240464 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 110.315789474 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205724669711 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633939815465 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527573521386 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147830405396 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691989647088 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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