Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics (like state Olympics team).
A controversial debate which is often raised in every country is the amount of budget that government should consider for various fields. Some groups of people hold the view that government should spend more money on championships. However, the other groups may take an opposite point and believe that art and its related area are more important. From my vantage point, I concur with the latter group and believe that arts in all types need to be invested more than athletics. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through three major reasons among countless ones.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that arts establish foundation of a society's culture. In fact, people can present their feeling and emotions through arts which in long terms give a through picture of a society. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborate above is the numerous fine art museums in historical cities which hold famous art works of their artists such as paintings, statues and so on. Therefore, by spending more money on arts, more people can take advantage of art's facilities to show their abilities.
The second reason which deserves some words here is that spending money in arts is a profitable investment in spite of athletics which its achievements are temporarily. In other words, art has a high-standing place among people. But many of them can afford it with many difficulties such as high cost of tools, workshops and even exhibition galleries. Despite all problems they confront, they do their best to achieve their goals. On the other hands, athletics are usually well-paid and have many sponsors. But they usually cannot satisfy their fans.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind. The noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics, revealed by a recent social research conducted in our country, show that a significant percent of participated people think allocating budget to arts is more important that athletics. The study was done among 120 higher educated people from diverse field of studies except art and sports to reduce the effect of biasing.
To wrap it up, contemplating all aforementioned reasons one soon realizes that governments should pay attention to arts financially more than athletics. If it goes in this way, we will soon witness a noticeable dawn of talented artists who improve the level of general culture of the country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'thorough' (accurate, exhaustive)?
Suggestion: thorough
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, in fact, such as, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07764705882 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75267570364 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567058823529 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4374554556 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.761904762 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202264516391 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586366887663 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568955493001 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109905104526 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504080845498 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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