In the modern era, the government funding is common in different fields. It is debated that whether the government should invest the art field or support the athletics. From my perspective, although the art is important for the public, the government should pay more attention to the prosperity of the athletic field.
Firstly, the art does play an essential role in modern citizen's life in various aspects. The art, including the instruments, the painting, the photography and even the game, which recently is recognized as the ninth art, forms a base part in public' leisure activities. Therefore, the government should fund the art industry as a public welfare. In China, for example, all museum is funded by the government and all free opened to the public. People like to visit those places as a leisure activity on the weekend with their kids. Additionally, visiting museum could also inspire the student to find the field they are interested in, which produce the positive effect on their career. Therefore, the government should fund the art.
However, the athletics are no less important than the art and the government funding are more critical to the athletics than the arts. First, training athletics need a great amount of money which cannot be afforded by an ordinary family. Since the training position, the diet plan and the salary of supporting stuff are all expensive, the funding of government is necessary. The athletics, in turn, would bring back honor for their country in the international competition which could be an important indicator of a nation's comprehensive ability.
Although the art is important to a nation, the government should still fund the sports field since the government investment could be risky for the integrity of the art. The government investment, in the final, would have a selecting system to decide which artist should be funded, which might cause many impoverished artists to change their style to ingratiate the government standard. In the long run, the government fundings can be hardly called beneficial to the art field.
To sum up, despite the importance of the art, the government should still mainly invest the athletic field, since the athletic field is more dependent on the external funding and an important indicator to the comprehensive power of a nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, therefore, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 43.0788530466 21% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15303430079 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79338912682 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490765171504 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 16.0 3.08781362007 518% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.57066948 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0555555556 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222933465303 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893375222882 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653424011938 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146968674304 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0193613211032 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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