How governments should pay attention to different fields has always been a noteworthy matter when it comes to talking about the government's budget. There are a plethora of people who contend that it is more important to devote more money in support of art compared to athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Others disagree. I, to a great extent, corroborate the first perspective as it seems more rational. In what follows, I will attempt to clarify the reasons in support of my viewpoint in detail.
To commence with, the most imperative reasons comes to mind is that the effect of art on people's mind. It is conspicuous that all the artistic people have more special thought and show these thoughts to their work. Actually, their need to depict something in other ways allow them to become an artist and create an artwork could help them to be happier. Let me tell something about the social artice which I read in the Facebook, last week. It was written by an Iranian artist, whom I admired the most, allude to the effect of being in touch with art and euphoric. The more people be in touch with art, the more cheer up. As you can see, it is significant to spend more money in support of art since it could have good effect on people's mind.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned here is about the low support of art in many countries. For the purpose of illustration, let me allude to my country and how the government support the art. Unfortunately, in my country the government place a low value on art and the budget which has been allocated to the art is less than amount you can consider! There are a limit number of theater hall, just in large city. The actors usually have limit income and in some case, they just work because of their favorite. About the sponsoring, I should mention that they have not a strength sponsor since they could not have the opportunity to watch by a large amount of the people, actually their exhibitions not like sport's matches. As it is clear, in many countries, the art needs to become more important and the governments should dedicate more attention to them.
To wrap it all up, taking all the aforementioned ideas into consideration, we may draw the conclusion that not only can people get more energy by be in touch with the art but also the art is not like other fields and most of the time had more restriction, So it is highly recommended that the governments allocate more money to support them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reasons'' or 'reason's'?
Suggestion: reasons'; reason's
... To commence with, the most imperative reasons comes to mind is that the effect of art...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, such as, talking about, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62186788155 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60970105344 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489749430524 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.689110533 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.722222222 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3888888889 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270162271879 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791038788339 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730900576975 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169284114488 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257556936774 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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