Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Playing an indispensable role in both individual and professional lives of all people, the support of government has been of the first-rate importance for all individuals. However, governments should spend money in different fields to support people in different situations. A question that might arise, with respect to this fact, is whether governments should spend money in support of athletics rather than in support of the arts. Personally, I am of the conviction that the government should spend money on athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Not only, can the winners of the Olympic teams bring honor to the country, but also there are more private companies who rather invest in arts than in athletics.
To commence with, it should be really important for all the people who live in a country to make a country honorable. Strictly speaking, we should always make efforts to earn some victory over other people who they live in other countries to make our people happy. Everybody has some roles in order to make this dream comes true. The role of government is to support their athletics and to provide them with the best opportunities to let them have every essential means of success. In this way, there is more chance that Olympics teams win in Olympic and make their countries honorable. For example, a research done by German researches reveals that the most successful country in the Olympic is the one that the government invests most of their money in them rather than art and other fields and the people there are so happy and honorable for that reason.
Another justification for lending the credence to the argument is that most of the companies who are private prefer to invest money in the arts rather than invest money in support of athletics. Broadly speaking, companies like to invest their money where they can get the most profit out of them and investing money on the athletics who want to compete with other athletics that are mostly well exercised is risky enough that they prefer not to do that. To illustrate this, I recently read an article that Iranian people conduct a survey and ask the companies whether they will support athletics by investing money on their teams or not and nearly 70% of them find that too risky to do that. That being so, it is more important for a country and also sports teams in a country that their governments invest money on them.
Drawing upon these reasons, I am convinced that the government should spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Adopting this policy would entail some benefits that flourish country is one of them. For that reason, I strongly suggest governments let the private company invest money on arts and they mostly concentrate on supporting our athletics. Only in this way, we would have a much honorable country.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, well, broadly speaking, for example, such as, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91511387164 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63091363462 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409937888199 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6485195001 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.947368421 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4210526316 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322372376131 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125551423783 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114302312381 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247719776059 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111319015485 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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