Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Playing an indispensable role in both individual and professional lives of all people, education has been of the first-rate importance of all individuals. However, there are multiple ways of motivation to follow education. A question that might arise, with respect to this fact, is whether motivating children by giving them money in order to motivate them a good idea or not. Personally, I am of the conviction that giving money to children in order to make them motivated is good. Not only can they set goals for their education and earn something, but also they can learn how to manage their finance.
To commence with, there is no arguing that learning is somehow boring and putting all your effort into educating and learning new things is going to be exhaust you. With respect to this fact, the parent should use various kind of ways to help their children not to think education as something boring and help them to have some motivation. take my experience as an example to illustrate this, when I was a child and had exams I always tried to find a way not to studying because I had found it so boring and even though I knew that learning new things may help me get a better score but I could not help it. Afterwhile my parents helped me to overcome this by giving me money after each achievement I got. In that way I became motivated and also I didn't feel that much exhausted.
Another justification lending credence to the argument is that children will learn how to manage the money they get from parents and it will help them to become prosperous, afterwhile. To delineate, children will learn that they can buy some of their favorite stuff from the money that they get from their parents. Also, in this way, they will improve their skills of saving money. Broadly speaking, all individuals have that instinct to earn money in order to buy better things for their lives and to be more comfortable. For instance, I had a banking account that I put my money that I earn when my parents gave to me to motivate me. after years of saving, I finally could by a bicycle that I really wanted with that money and that learned me the skill of saving. If my parents didn't give me that money, I would not know how to manage my money.
Drawing upon the reasons, I am convinced that giving the children money in order to make them motivated to get high grades is a good idea. Adding this policy would have a number of benefits that more qualified individuals are one of them. For this, I strongly recommend that people should find the best ways to motivate children and take this issue seriously that their children may exhaust from educating. Only in this way, our children would flourish.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, while, broadly speaking, for instance, kind of, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58713692946 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5006645008 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452282157676 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4222860487 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.285714286 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9523809524 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247524143698 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807593074007 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539613338771 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159310468351 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293458577899 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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